August 15, 2021

chunky gravy ---1st draft


don’t take the lumps

                                out of my gravy, i say

don’t beat the lumps

                                out of my gravy

cause i’ve been craving baked potato

i’ve been craving dirt fruit

put something gritty on my plate

put some soil in my soul

thirty minutes in the oven

                                is eternal

and i’ve been craving rain on hot pavement

trees with thick leaves to hide me from the sun

i’ve been craving playground simplicity

i’ve been craving crystal balls that know it all

                                and never tell

so don’t take those lumps

                                out of my gravy

nope-nope-nope

don’t steal no lumps

                                from my gravy

                                cause i’m craving love

the kind that chases me down

so put both hands on the back of my neck

                when you kiss me

i’ve been craving moon landings

and endless human compassion  

the rehydration of the earth

streets alive, café windows full of people

faces full of smiles and mouths full of porkchop

                                (pass the gravy)

i’ve been craving wasting my time

in old blue cars on dirt roads

a magic stone to skip all the way to the other shore

stevie wonder’s superstition and my cherie amour

                                (pass the gravy)

that lumpy candy

cause i’m craving something chucky, something savory

                something funky

                                it’s not crazy

just means i’m hungry for more

or less, whatever blessing be for me

that desire

                                that earth-fire

put the fleet in my feet

put the hustle in my whistle

                                feed the soil to my soul

and pass the gravy


23 comments:

  1. OMG the is so earthy yummy. My favourite lines
    "so put both hands on the back of my neck
    when you kiss me"

    Thanks for dropping by to read mine

    Much❤love

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  2. This just sings--that A sound like in Gravy is everywhere in the piece and it lights is up --makes me want to dance

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    1. thank you audrey, so glad you liked this

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  3. OMG, this awakes all my "cravins"! What a fun ramble through your fantasies! Love it!

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  4. Incredible. Definitely begs to be performed aloud.

    My faves:

    “i’ve been craving playground simplicity
    i’ve been craving crystal balls that know it all
    and never tell”

    “nope-nope-nope
    don’t steal no lumps
    from my gravy
    cause i’m craving love
    the kind that chases me down”

    “so put both hands on the back of my neck
    when you kiss me
    i’ve been craving moon landings
    and endless human compassion”

    “i’ve been craving wasting my time ... that lumpy candy”

    So, yeah. I’m crazy about this style. :)

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    1. thanks peppermint, means a lot to me that you enjoyed this

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    2. hey, peppermint, your blogs keep disappearing, where to i go to read your work? everything ok?

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    3. lol ... let’s chalk it up to mental illness :)

      peppermintlava.blogspot.com

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    4. alright, it's back online! and mental illnesses are some of my favorite illnesses, so no worries =)

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  5. Oh yeah, we need some lumps in our gravy; let's not go bland. This is a lovely, joyous read in the way it sings and dances along. And I love all the half-rhymes and echoes. Definitely a great one to be performed aloud, I agree.

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    1. thank you rosemary, glad you enjoyed this

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  6. I like old blue cars on dirt roads. I want to go to a poetry yardsale!

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    1. yes, dirt roads are my favorite roads, thank you colleen, glad you enjoyed

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  7. you sure love your potatoes. and gravy.
    wonder when it is safe for all of us to go out and play.

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  8. Oh, WOW! Your words, vivid imagery and rhythm have me sit at the edge of my sit as I read. It deserves to be read aloud or as performance poetry. Outstanding!

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  9. "and i’ve been craving rain on hot pavement
    trees with thick leaves to hide me from the sun
    i’ve been craving playground simplicity
    i’ve been craving crystal balls that know it all
    and never tell"

    I love those lines so much. The same goes for the tone, rhythm, and mood. They depth and fun to the poem, making the topic light and serious at the same time. The end is extra delicious.

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    1. thank you magaly, so glad you liked this

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  10. I adore the playfulness and earnestness of this. It was delightful to read out loud a second time. It could just be my take on it, but that longing for lumps seems like a demand for realness, because a perfectly smoothed out gravy (or life) lacks that character that makes it meaningful.

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    1. thanks rommy, for reading it twice even!

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