June 9, 2021

wild blue yonder

ok, so for the "risk" challenge over at D'verse, i am attempting to write a train wreck, which is not a style of poetry, it's just a train wreck, except with airplanes =)

 

flight seven seventy seven destination

                                                       side-of-mountain 

 

as the flight attendances take their break in the baggage hold playing dice games

the pilot performs stand-up in first class and the last green olive on earth swims

in his

very dry

mar

tin

i

meanwhile

 

                                (the strike-ready snake will not hesitate

 

the headlights of the tracker-trailer will not blink

 

                                political pundits scream theater in a crowded fire

 

                and all the hamsters trade their hamster wheels for happy meals)

 

the inflight meal was a can of worms

the inflight movie was a documentary on the opiate effects of inflight movies

meanwhile

all the corporate risk managers travelling to the annual security convention

block the airplane emergency doors wearing parachutes half-eaten from last year’s

                                                                                           plague of miller

                                                                                           moths  

 

and the traffic courts paved the road to hell with endless debate over the insignificance

of seven hundred and seventy seven good intentions but can’t remember where they

                                                                              put their 

                                                                    prayer beads                                                                     

meanwhile

all the doctor’s doctor their doctrines of the dying patient’s last rite to self-righteousness

 

                (righteousness (noun) a highly volatile substance manufactured in the mind

                dirty burning no alternative fuel always blowing up in someone’s face)

 

meanwhile

a mountain looms

big

purple

majestic

with big purple arms open wide beckoning come to daddy

come to gravity, drop your f bombs over denver and set your engines

on fire

hurry back to earth, a big dumb rock, but also a mother

suddenly scolding us: if you can’t solve your problems yourself, then i will

                                                                               solve them

for you

which is great news for the cockroach dreaming of opposable thumbs

  

20 comments:

  1. Is this Spirit Airlines? :D

    Loved this especially:

    "the inflight meal was a can of worms

    the inflight movie was a documentary on the opiate effects of inflight movies

    meanwhile

    all the corporate risk managers travelling to the annual security convention

    block the airplane emergency doors wearing parachutes half-eaten from last year’s

    plague of miller

    moths"

    The descriptions, the humor, the formatting, definitely an indication of an airplane wreck. ;)

    I really enjoyed reading this; it's very vivid.

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    1. spirit airlines, thats funny, yeah could very well be. thank lucy, im glad you liked this (and i was just at your site, that poem was great)

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  2. This is out there! Up there! Down there!!! All over the damn place. I love it and your unique style.

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    1. heh, yes indeed, but i warned you, i told you it was a wreck. thanks helen

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  3. Cool experimental piece! I echo Lucy on those lines on the inflight meal and movie 😆 Your righteousness definition was intriguing and I like how you keep with the metaphor of a plane wreck that plays out like a train wreck. It's all very dreamlike almost as if we are high up in the clouds and getting ready to make a sudden descent! 😱

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    1. thank you tricia, this was a fun experiment to write, and thank you for hosting this challenge, i had a lot of fun with.

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  4. This once sky jalopy and its once oblivious, cargo heading to comforting maternal oblivion, obliverated. Enjoyed the format, loved the plot

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    1. thank you sean, i like your summary there, right to the point, glad you liked this

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  5. so many great lines that flow and swoop and create a crescendo ~

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    1. thank you grapeling, glad you liked this.

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  6. Loved it. I wasn't sure where it was going at the start, but then you drew me in completely. It's hard to pick a favorite line, but I chuckled at "the inflight movie was a documentary on the opiate effects of inflight movies"

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    1. thanks ron, i wasn't sure where it was going either, glad it eventually went somewhere... sorta =)

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  7. This is brilliant! I loved the word play of it, and also the humour 'the inflight movie was a documentary on the opiate effects of inflight movies.' I have to say though, it has not eased my fear of flying any...

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    1. thank you ingrid, glad you liked this, also, i really enjoyed your poem, i was very impressed.

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  8. This poem is amazing! I feel like every line is a a knock out. There's also this note of wry humor throughout. I just love this one

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    1. thank you jyp, i not totally sold on it but it was fun write, a little more work and it might be a decent poem. thanks again

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  9. Oh.. this is so great, so many things coming together... I'm a bit reminded by that movie Airplane!

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    1. i've seen that movie in years, but now that you mention it i can definitely it. thank you, glad you liked it

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  10. There are so many exceptional lines here. Brilliant write 💝💝

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